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the first time I caught sight of your
glistening, marble eyes,
I decided you disgust me.
I hate you the way I hate perfection:
merciless, like the snap of mantis jaws.

every fact of you is pretentious,
held high like you raise a middle finger.
You, the artist, always sculpting things,
tried to squeeze my malleable heart like white clay
and stash it in your pocket to rattle with stones.

paint me an unflinching self portrait, my dear:
this skyscraper of a boy shaking with anticipation
to build and destroy, build and destroy.
you sink in tooth and talon at first mention of beauty,
love-biting Aphrodite as though you were equals.
you're a statue, a prison,
a tasteless reproduction of a child's Heaven
but you are no museum.

you may hang yourself in gilded frames,
forcing masses to silence with obscurity,
but that does not make you a hallowed hall.
no, I fear you're no Metropolitan.

you look at me, daring to think you understand.
your words trickle from my lips like a waterfall
as you tell me what a strange and marvelous Chimera I am.

your voice scratches at my spine, persistent, but
I've long since lost feeling in these flimsy balsa bones.
you think I'm your tangled marionette, a plaything
you awkwardly stitched long ago,
but I'm here to prove you wrong:
I tied myself up and hung from the rafters
a hundred times before I felt your touch.

today, I write you my goodbye letter.
you never suspected that your Pinocchio girl
could pick up scissors and cut herself free.
you were too busy playing god to notice.
the farther I run from your twisted lunatic asylum,
the more I realize that you're no Louvre.
you sad boy, you're no museum.
A practice invective poem that I wrote in my slam poetry club. I haven't performed it yet, but I plan to...if I can work up the nerve! I'm actually fairly proud of this poem, which is weird for me. I won't say who this is about, but interestingly enough, when I read it to my mother she guessed it on her first try. She knows me so well. :heart:

If you liked this, let me know! I love your feedback! ;)

2013 littleblueraccoon

EDIT: DEAR SWEET BABY JESUS. A DAILY DEVIATION? Now I'm really feeling confident enough to read it to the club...I'm dumbfounded. I LOVE YOU GUYS SO MUCH.
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
A beautiful poem full of raw emotion and bittersweet words...:icon1stbutterflykiss:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Student Writer
Aw, thank you! :huggle:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
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Zetawolf97 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist
I just saw your newest poem "reasons to love a shy girl" yesterday, so I decided to see if any of your other poems were as good and well, I must say, I'm quite impressed. I haven't read all of them yet, however I'm sure they are all wonderful. :D
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Student Writer
You're lovely, just lovely. Thank you so much! :tighthug:
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:iconzetawolf97:
Zetawolf97 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist
Well thank you. Please don't crush me though. O.o
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, okay. How about this hug? :huggle:
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:iconzetawolf97:
Zetawolf97 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist
Much better ^^
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CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this poem. I just love that line 'you're a statue, a prison, a tasteless reproduction of a child's Heaven, but you are no museum.' Its so hard for myself try and analyze this poem because I'm just so in love with how you've worded your metaphors and symbolism stuffs that its hard for me to sink into it. So maybe I won't analyze it, and just stay in blind love. :)
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! You're very sweet. :heart: That's truly one of my favorite lines.
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CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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:iconthekingkirk121:
thekingkirk121 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
I just found you today on DeviantArt from your newest post and now I'm inclined to read all of your poems and stuff. Thank you for making such beautiful poetry, and keep making more!!!
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student Writer
I LOVE YOU! :huggle:

Thanks for all the support! I really appreciate it.
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:iconjesitel:
Jesitel Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is utterly wonderful!!! Thank you!
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Student Writer
No, thank YOU! :heart: Glad you like it!
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:iconjesitel:
Jesitel Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very much! I want to print it out on fancy paper and hang it on my wall!
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Student Writer
Ooh, cool! :)
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Savaliste Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
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rheashelby Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student General Artist
What did you picture, as you wrote it?
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
The person, mainly. I pictured his face, and his mannerisms, and his art. Before I knew it, all of these words were being written. It was crazy, haha. 
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DesuFaceSophia Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like how it was like '-you disgusted me.'
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
haha, thank you! :)
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:iconmistressofquills:
MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
Wow.... this is beautiful. There is so much imagery, but it all makes sense and ties together with that theme of being a puppet. Very well done, and congratulations on the DD! It was well deserved!:love:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind words. :tighthug:
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:iconmistressofquills:
MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
You're very welcome! :pat:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Aww, thank you! :huggle:
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
amazing - congrats on the DD
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks! :)
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AnAwkwardBlue Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
I love the last stanza the best: "I bet you never suspected that your Pinocchio girl could pick up scissors and cut herself free..."
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! That's one of my favorite parts, too. :)
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:iconhihi2462:
hihi2462 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
That was amazing
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
:hug:
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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hat's off. This is brilliantly written! :)
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! :tighthug:
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AquaGalaxy Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
congratulations on getting a DD on this awesome piece! >w<
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! ^^
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SunlitGem Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
:happybounce: Happy Clap Cutie Emote :clap: :jumpingjacks: Explode la plz 

That is REALLY AWESOME. I wish I had another word in my vocabulary that could convey just how amazing this is ^-^
But... who's POV is it from? And who's the artistic guy?
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks! (I like the emotes, btw.)

I suppose it's in my POV. And the artistic guy's identity shall forever remain top-secret. :heart:
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SunlitGem Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
I actually spent ages choosing them :sweatdrop: revamp v2 

Your poems are REALLY good. It's like looking into the depths of your SOUUUULLLLLLLL 
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO 


No, really,evry time I try to do a poem, I end up with a little rhyme for kids 
:shrug: or :dunno: 
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Student Writer
Haha, that's too cute! 

And thank you!

I'm sure your poems are good, too, but if you want to improve, just practice (and who says little rhymes for kids are a bad thing? hehe).
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SunlitGem Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Well, it kinda suits me because I am childish XD
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Shire7 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats to the well deserved DD :heart: <3
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :glomp:
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Shire7 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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Mazdi Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
Woosh...the imagery in here leaves me a bit breathless! This is extremely well done and leaves me curious as to who would merit such words...

Congrats on the DD!
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
I'm so glad! The person I wrote this about is no walk in the park, haha. 

Thank you very much! :heart:
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on having your piece featured as one of today's Daily Deviations! :la: :glomp:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! I couldn't believe my eyes when I logged in earlier, haha! :huggle:
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