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We wait in the car outside,
my hand dangling from the window,
my fingernails kissed with fog.
Silvery curls of smoke
rise like a dragon's breath
from the thing between my fingers.

You look at me, horrified,
staring at the black and blue
stains upon my tongue,
the marks of damage
cutting deep into my skin,
deep beneath tissue,
deep enough to corrode my bones.

I'm living in someone else's death,
borrowing a pair of cheap, shriveled lungs
that rattle loosely like leaves
in my chest.
I exhale a fresh, decaying breath,
and though I try to be diplomatic,
I know in my heart I'm just mocking you.

"Those things are gonna kill you,"
you tell me, all sage wisdom and disapproval
and sudden concern for my well-being.
"It's six bucks for a pack of cancer."
I try to laugh, and cough
then laugh some more
at the fact that I can't breathe.

In a greasy ashtray, I stamp out
my last flimsy cigarette,
ash and sorrow lying dead
in the dimly lit embers.
If only I could stamp you out
as easily as I've stamped myself out.
The title, "Tobacco and Peppermint," is a lyric from one of my favorite songs: "Jaws Theme Swimming" by Brand new. This poem is inspired by it. :love:

In a car outside, we stalk the idle kind.
If you're leaving, just let me know.
Tobacco and peppermint, dusting for fingerprints.
A film in her eyes from the glow.


Also, does anybody know how much a pack of cigarettes costs? As a nonsmoker I kind of had to guess about it, haha. If you like this, let me know! I love your feedback! =P

2013 littleblueraccoon
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, congrats on the DLD! This is really a wonderful poem. :heart:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
:blushes: Thank you! 
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome. :D
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, thank you! I'm honored! :blushes:
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IrelElengar Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
Me: reads this. Jaw drops open and falls off. Click on person's account to discover who this amazing artist is. Enough said. :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Eeek, thank you so much! :squee:
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KyaniteArcher Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm living in someone else's death, 
borrowing a pair of cheap, shriveled lungs
that rattle loosely like leaves
in my chest.

Love it. Everything- down to the realistic dialogue and your exquisite choice of words- adds impact to the piece & shows the reader the main character's personality.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Student Writer
Aww, so sweet! :glomp: Thank you very much! 
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