Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
We wait in the car outside,
my hand dangling from the window,
my fingernails kissed with fog.
Silvery curls of smoke
rise like a dragon's breath
from the thing between my fingers.

You look at me, horrified,
staring at the black and blue
stains upon my tongue,
the marks of damage
cutting deep into my skin,
deep beneath tissue,
deep enough to corrode my bones.

I'm living in someone else's death,
borrowing a pair of cheap, shriveled lungs
that rattle loosely like leaves
in my chest.
I exhale a fresh, decaying breath,
and though I try to be diplomatic,
I know in my heart I'm just mocking you.

"Those things are gonna kill you,"
you tell me, all sage wisdom and disapproval
and sudden concern for my well-being.
"It's six bucks for a pack of cancer."
I try to laugh, and cough
then laugh some more
at the fact that I can't breathe.

In a greasy ashtray, I stamp out
my last flimsy cigarette,
ash and sorrow lying dead
in the dimly lit embers.
If only I could stamp you out
as easily as I've stamped myself out.
The title, "Tobacco and Peppermint," is a lyric from one of my favorite songs: "Jaws Theme Swimming" by Brand new. This poem is inspired by it. :love:

In a car outside, we stalk the idle kind.
If you're leaving, just let me know.
Tobacco and peppermint, dusting for fingerprints.
A film in her eyes from the glow.


Also, does anybody know how much a pack of cigarettes costs? As a nonsmoker I kind of had to guess about it, haha. If you like this, let me know! I love your feedback! =P

© 2013 littleblueraccoon
Add a Comment:
 
:iconguineveretogwen:
GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, congrats on the DLD! This is really a wonderful poem. :heart:
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
:blushes: Thank you! 
Reply
:iconguineveretogwen:
GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome. :D
Reply
:icondailylitdeviations:
DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, thank you! I'm honored! :blushes:
Reply
:iconirelelengar:
IrelElengar Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
Me: reads this. Jaw drops open and falls off. Click on person's account to discover who this amazing artist is. Enough said. :)
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
Eeek, thank you so much! :squee:
Reply
:iconkyanitearcher:
KyaniteArcher Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm living in someone else's death, 
borrowing a pair of cheap, shriveled lungs
that rattle loosely like leaves
in my chest.

Love it. Everything- down to the realistic dialogue and your exquisite choice of words- adds impact to the piece & shows the reader the main character's personality.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Student Writer
Aww, so sweet! :glomp: Thank you very much! 
Reply
:iconkyanitearcher:
KyaniteArcher Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Anytime. :)
Reply
:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
some really nice lines in there.

then laugh some more 
at the fact that I can't breathe

if only I could stamp you out
as easily as I've stamped myself out.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! That last line is my favorite, too. :giggle:
Reply
:icontaterchip5001:
Taterchip5001 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! :wave:
I'm here on behalf of :iconfriendly-features:
Your work has been featured in this week's Feature Showcase! fav.me/d6pdv7u
Have a great day! :aww:
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, wow! Thank you so much! :tighthug:
Reply
:iconsingagainsoon:
singagainsoon Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is fantastic c: i love the imagery your words created, and i saw the title and thought immediately of that song.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! Hooray, another Brand New fan (and Doctor Who fan)! :heart:
Reply
:iconsingagainsoon:
singagainsoon Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
two of my favorite things!! :la:
Reply
:iconmendedpixie:
Mendedpixie Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I low this poem. I think my favorite part was 'fingernail kissed with fog'. That was beautiful.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
So sweet! Thank you! :love:
Reply
:iconmendedpixie:
Mendedpixie Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Haha you're welcome!
Reply
:iconlistentomescream:
ListentomeSCREAM Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Enchanting. Hauntingly beautiful.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Ooh, thank you! What a nice compliment! :hug:
Reply
:iconsecret-ninja-super-m:
SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   General Artist
Kinda sad, but a very good poem! I like the emotion and imagery.
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :tighthug:
Reply
:icondodsmonster:
Dodsmonster Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely :)
Reply
:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconlittleblueraccoon: More from littleblueraccoon


Featured in Collections

Literature by JayDanjerCobain

Poetry by 91816119

Poems Litterature Typography by TheForsakenGoddess


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
October 4, 2013
File Size
1.3 KB
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,000
Favourites
43 (who?)
Comments
27
×