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Do you ever think
about how
life is just
breathing
until you don't?

My friend once told me
that everything you do in life
simply leads up to your death.
Which, I suppose,
is true,
but I like to think of it
as living and living
until death stops you
from living anymore.

"Why do anything in life,"
he reasoned,
"if you're going to die anyway?"

I thought for a moment,
and then replied,
"Why do people send roses
to their loved ones
if the flowers just die?

Maybe everything is
temporary.
Maybe we should stop
looking for forever,
because we're never going
to find it.

You don't get a prize
for dying.
It would be in your best interests
to live right now,
don't you think?"
ugghhhhhh i'm not happy with this one but i had a conversation w/ my friend about this and i keep thinking about how temporary everything in life is. idk. i wanted to write a good poem but this is just askjfksdjf. poop.

anyway. probably gonna scrap this later. 

copyright me you lil shits
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openskyline Featured By Owner Edited Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
But life is so much more than merely breathing. 

Breathing is for wild animals. True animals, beasts who are not developed in the way that humans are. Humans... Humans have something more. Humans can write, for example, and they can wonder. They can hate and love. 

Animals live for the sake of living, they live to survive. THEY live because that is how they are programmed to work. they simply survive, they inhale and exhale until they die, but they don't have a true purpose besides mating and surviving. 

Humans used to be like this, too. Eventually, over many years, we have evolved to become what we are today. 
Humans need something to live for, something more than finding food and reproducting. This is why so many humans die at their own hands. Animals do not commit suicide.

in the end, yes, we all die. Humans and animals and microscopic organisms will all perish together. In the end, it is easy to decide that our lives are nothing and mean nothing and we might as well not live because someday we won't, and it won't matter to anyone that we existed in the first place. 

And yet, somehow, it does matter. It has to matter. Humans, for the most part, truly live. Breathing is not truly living. It's just staying alive. 

(And now the disclaimer. I don't believe that humans are superior to other species or that animals are incapable of feeling. In fact I am in huge support of animal rights, and I think that humans are rather dumb and are trashing the planet a bit. This is just my thoughts on this specific subject and the meaning of life. urrrgrgghhh sorry this is so long and cliche and kinda silly but I wanted to say it.) 

oh, and I really love yor poem. IT makes me think and it is super smooth and well written.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Student Writer
This is honestly the most thought-provoking comment I've gotten on this piece. It's very insightful and you make plenty of good points. I especially agree with this idea that humans think differently. To quote one of my favorite movies, The Dead Poet's Society:

"We don't read and write poetry because it's cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for."

Life really is an unfathomably complex corkscrew. Whenever you think you've made it to the end, it twists around again. I like that sort of wild unpredictability. But if you ignore all the beautiful twists and turns, you're left with the bare minimum of survival, which you pointed out: breathing in and breathing out until you eventually stop doing either.

Thank you so much, I appreciate the lovely comment! :heart:
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openskyline Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So glad you liked my comment. 

I also love the Dead Poet's Society!! And watched it recently in honor of Robin Williams. 
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infatuatedsanity Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so lovely
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :)
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SkylarkTheCat Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Student General Artist
I like this, reminded me of Fault in Our Stars
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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SkylarkTheCat Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student General Artist
:)
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CelestialFox13 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This reminded me of "The Fault in Our Stars" and It's really good. I love your poems :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Writer
Oh, the infinity part was actually kinda inspired by TFiOS. :meow: Thank you, I'm happy to hear it!
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CelestialFox13 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Very cool! No problem, I look forward to more of your works.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Words well said
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime!
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arabesque-o Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Student Photographer
this is lovely. don't dismiss it.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Writer
Ah, thank you friend :)
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MegzLuvsYouAll Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014
I really like this poem.

I like to believe that even though our lives are temporary, our memories live on. Sure, our first kiss was probably only a few seconds, but that memory still lives. That feeling we get when we accomplish a big goal is temporary, but hell, it felt good, and looking back at it, it still leaves us feeling good from the memory.

I don't like to think of life as something temporary. The thought leaves me bummed. This is going to sound so clique, but life is a gift, something we should enjoy while we have it. :)

Sorry about that whole speech there, hehe. So cheesy!blush  But anyway, great poem! I like your response to your friend, "Why do people send roses to their loved ones if the flowers just die?" Great line! I love the poem. :) Keep on writing!
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Student Writer
Aw, no, don't be sorry! I love this comment; you bring up a really good point. I think that's a good way of thinking about life: just enjoy it while you've got it, because it's all you're gonna get! :giggle:

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this, and I promise I'll keep writing. c:
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MegzLuvsYouAll Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014
Thank you! And your very welcome! :D
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momochan10 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this one... is just amazing
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :huggle:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really love this!
I love your response.
I want to put a quote of it on my quote wall,
but I can't pick just a few lines I want to quote!
:huggle:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! Aww, and the quote wall means a lot to me~ :blushes:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What are your favorite lines from this?
Those are the ones I'll use. :eager:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Student Writer
Hmm...I'm always critiquing my own work, but I think I'm rather fond of this chunk:

"Maybe everything is 
temporary.
Maybe we should stop
looking for forever,
because we're never going
to find it."


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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
There is is!
Quote wall it goes!
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Writer
Yay! :la:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i really like the
"Why do people send roses
to their loved ones
if the flowers just die?

this was just an interesting and beautiful poem. don't beat yourself up so much about it. :huggle: 
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'm just hard on myself in general. Can't help it. Sometimes it sucks, but I like to challenge myself. :blushes:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
we all are. i struggle with that too, with not ever feeling good enough. so do i, but when you fail the challenge... :faint: 
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kurodaisy Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i do like it, but i feel like it would have left a greater impact if you ended it right after the line, "why do people send roses to their loved ones if the flowers just die?" it's beautiful to me. TvT;; i know i felt the impact there. regardless, it's still good. i don't think you should be so hard on yourself. keep writing, please! ;v;
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student Writer
:nod: Ahh, thank you for the feedback! I do like that line. Maybe I'll rearrange it so that it's the last one. I will keep writing, no worries! :hug:
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kurodaisy Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
;v; )/ it's no problem at all! thank you for the feedback, too! TvT) it makes me happy to think that i could help, even a little bit. i wish you the best! 
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Student Writer
I wish the same for you! :clap:
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Vvlad-vVolfen Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
In the cosmic sense, nothing we do matters at all. So All that really matters is what matters to you yourself. Simple as that. :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student Writer
:O_o: Whoa, good point. 
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Edited Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like the way this is because its conversational flow. There aren't any pretty metaphors or fluff. It's to the point and abrupt. Much like death is. 
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I wanted to make this one nice and simple. It sounded less like a poem to me, and that's why I don't like it so much, but I'm glad to hear that you did! :huggle:
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euterpeflare Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
This is not poop! This is amazing let me tell you. And I agree completely. Life is temporary, and some people might ask "why try, then?" Because it's the only fraction of life we'll ever get.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
:giggle:

Thank you very much! That's the stand I took in the "why bother living" argument. Why watch a movie if it will eventually end? Why eat food if you're fueling yourself up every day only to eventually kick the bucket?

Well, why not? It's all you've got, so it's up to you to enjoy it, you know?
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euterpeflare Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
Exactly! I agree. We can't just look for forever, because we've only been given a numbered days, and 86,000 seconds in each of those numbered days. You might as well do something for each second, to make your life worth it: not for others, but for yourself.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
:nod: That's exactly what I mean!
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DarkRose407 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Despite whether you think it's good or not, it does make you think . I think that's what poems are often supposed to do, so I really like it for that. 
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah, I love how poetry can give people ideas. :blushes: Thank you!
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DarkRose407 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I agree wholeheartedly 
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SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014   General Artist
That is the exact reason I don't like being given flowers. 

So much philosophical thought stemmed(Wtf, possible flower pun?) from this. Good job.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
Really? I'm not a big flower fan either, so it's nice to hear that someone else feels the same way. 

(haha, nice flower pun!)

Thank you! 
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boaa987 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
That... made me zone out for a long time. Longest I've probably ever though about life XD
Very interesting!
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
Haha, good to hear! I thought of the first line, and then I thought about breathing for a long time. You breathe and then you stop breathing and life is over, and I just couldn't get over that, so I wrote a poem. :giggle: Thank you! 
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boaa987 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
Thank you, for sharing your thoughts and insightful poem :heart:
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