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there are millions of poems
detailing the beauty of another’s eyes,
but your eyes, my love,
put all their cherry-picked words to shame.

ew, that verse is disgusting.
way too sappy.
I’m no good at love poems.
okay, hold on, let me
just start over.

you’re freaking excellent

no.

shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?
thou art more lovely and more temperate

wait.
i can’t take credit for that.
sonnets aren’t my style,
and anyway,
shakespeare beat me to the punch
four hundred some years ago.

uh, i mean, you’re funny
and really cute, like
i seriously love your eyes
because there’s meaning in there
somewhere.

and, and, you make me laugh.
you’re so hilarious.
and I have the drawing you gave me
two years ago, still hidden
folded up in my notebook.

plus, i mean, you’re everything to me.
no big deal, right,
considering the fact that we never
really speak anymore.
it’s cool.
i’m fine.
really.

oh my god that doesn’t
even sound like a poem.

fuck you.
my words have failed me
trying to capture you.
nothing sounds right

no shit. this poem is going
absolutely nowhere.

hey.
i just wanted to say that
you give me butterflies
in my stomach
like a tornado

that is so cliche wow

maybe i’ll just cut the crap
and let you know that

i love you.
lolwhut

 the other day, someone asked me why i never write about personal romance. this, this right here, is why. for two hours i tried to write about this guy, and then it just became a big aahdsfglhjabk that isn't even poetry. i was going to scrap it, but after the reaction this poem got, I'm going to keep it. i only posted it because i thought it was kinda funny. ;P

EDIT: FRONT PAGE YOU GUYS GOT ME TO THE FRONT PAGE AND Y'ALL ARE CRAZY BUT I TOTALLY LOVE YOU FOR IT
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:iconchrysailsisbestpony:
chrysailsisbestpony Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
I can relate to this.
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Student Writer
Good, I'm glad! :)
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:iconmiserabel:
miserabel Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think this should be in "Urban & Spoken Word", because damnit but I can hear someone ranting this out loud as I read. It feels original and ah, there's this familiar desperation, the constant "I feel this but I don't know the words to it" that is running through this.

It starts out as Not-A-Love-Poem and ends up being quite the opposite. I don't know, really, but it's good. Excellent work :love:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Student Writer
I think somebody else said the same thing. I'll probably change it some day when I stop being so lazy. :giggle: Yeah, it is pretty much just me ranting. I have such a hard time writing about people I care about. 

Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you like it!
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miserabel Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :meow:
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Woolfox Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014
Aww I just don't know what to say. : 3
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Student Writer
:hug:
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Namida713 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
homigoodness, this is beautiful. xD <3 I love it!!

made me laugh, and that about sums up how perfectly it is to try and write about your loved one. What else can you say but the cliches?
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Student Writer
hehe, thank you so much! 

oh, I know! It's so hard to say what you mean without being cheesy or overdone! :giggle:
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Morpheus1035 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
nice. although i am able to write love poems i'm happy with on occasion 
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! I applaud you, then. :clap: I can never get them right, haha.
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Zetawolf97 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist
This basically what all my poems end up being XD
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Student Writer
yep! it's so hard to get your feelings out in a way that sounds poetic!
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:icontheemptychest:
TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Cute. :aww:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! :juggle:
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LordLJCornellPhotos Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
That made me smile :)
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
Glad to hear it! :heart:
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animegirlcorycian Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is good and i agree it's true. But even with someone who does make love poems, they still can't get the words to say i love you to his/her beloved. (:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
It's a lot harder than I thought it was going to be. Thank you! :huggle:
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:iconsootandcinders:
sootandcinders Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
This is perfect and oh so true! :)
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
Hehe, thanks! :huggle:
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scaryllamastare Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
haha I love it! xD
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! (:
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:iconfluffybaseedit-chan:
FluffyBaseEdit-Chan Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Artist
its really nice and the first poem i found and love.Its kind of cute in a way, and funny. c:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :huggle:
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:iconfluffybaseedit-chan:
FluffyBaseEdit-Chan Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Artist
Your welcome! c:
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13ZexyDragons Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student General Artist
It's actually really good. It conveys the feelings perfectly.
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :blowkiss:
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:icon13zexydragons:
13ZexyDragons Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Student General Artist
Hey, not a problem! ^w^
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IchitakeNeongenesis Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love it! So cute :) As a guitarist they would make really cute and good song lyrics :D
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! That would be one heck of an interesting song! :heart:
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Talkerwolf Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
I think this might be my new favourite poem :)
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jazewel Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student General Artist
I second that ;D
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
:tighthug: Thank you!
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shimmytwist Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
great! i really like this one! :)
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you c:
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:iconlosgeloest:
losgeloest Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
That's amazing, i love it <3
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! (:
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:iconlosgeloest:
losgeloest Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
You're welcome :hug:
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SnowdropBee Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing!!!!! :D
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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the-Unknown-111 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, love you're choice of verses! It's funny, and still touching. :)
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you very much!
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:iconthe-unknown-111:
the-Unknown-111 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :squee:
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Jess2Lucky Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
woah.
this...this is something...right here.
this "poem" literally explains my situation perfectly. would you kill me if I stole it? xD just kidding, just kidding...
Seriously though, this is hilarious and perfect and I'm totally able to relate to it and...wow. it's just, you're an amazing writer. I don't know what else to say, but yeah.
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! (No stealing, haha!)
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ExpressKeeluh Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
so beautiful, i can understand the raw emotions. :heart:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
thank you! :hug:
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ExpressKeeluh Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem my dear :huggle:
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AmandaFrost Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014
i love it so much
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