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i. men fear strong women,
but she's far from strong.
this wisp of a girl
doesn't even need a hurricane
to fall apart.
she'd glued and re-glued,
old bonds wearing thin,
but if you ask politely,
she'll let you touch her scars.

ii. her lips are fettered in rusted chains.
you'd need a crowbar to pry up
her whispered secrets.
you are not worthy to hear her voice
just as she is not worthy to give it to you.
she told me everything she knows,
and i shut it away,
kept it safe.
i tied the threads into double knots
just to make sure
they wouldn't curl away from me,
twisted up like a dead spider's legs.

iii. she is hewn from shadow,
woven from grains of sand.
you might think she'd flow,
breeze by on a sparrow's breath,
but she's never been good at
anything but sinking.
she is buried treasure, and all
the things you wish you could forget.

iv. you found her washed up on the shore,
drawing pictures of her flickering soul,
and knew she was too unsteady to love.
when you reached for her heart,
your hands got cut and tangled
in her splintered ribcage

you smiled at your bleeding fingers
because you've always loved a challenge.
raise your hand if you're shy and insecure! *raises hand* 

I have no idea where this came from but ehh here it is. I know I haven't been updating recently, but it's been crazy here with the holidays coming and all. my family is so dysfunctional it's not even funny.

anyway, how did i do with this? good? bad? let me know! i love your feedback. :)

EDIT: I've found that so many of you guys relate to this poem! Us artsy types are usually shy, I suppose. You are all lovely people; I can't thank you enough for your support. :heart:

Also, a few people were confused on the meaning of this poem, so I'll include my explanation for it here as well:

The woman in this poem is meant to be viewed as quiet, timid, and demure on the outside. It isn't to say that this woman isn't strong; I tried to keep her personality out of the poem because I wanted to focus on how shyness appears from an outside perspective. I also don't mean to imply that shy women in general are weak, because that's just not true. This particular shy girl comes across as weak. That's all. The thing about men, though, is something I've heard said by many different people in my life. Hearing them say that is kind of what inspired me to write this, as a matter of fact! Blush

The first stanza is meant to describe how being shy makes the girl seem weak. The second describes how she's quiet, and keeps her thoughts to herself. The third represents the way she is easily lost in a crowd, and fragile-looking. The final stanza, with her drawing pictures on a shore alone, is supposed to show how she feels lonely deep down. Her splintered ribcage represents the ways she tries to distance herself from others.

If you find the guy at the end creepy, that's good. I guess I wanted to make the poem seem like an advertisement directed toward a not-so-good man as to why a shy girl would make an excellent "victim" for him. It is a little rough and I think some parts need a rewrite to make my point more clear.

Yeah...sorry for any confusion. I hope I didn't offend anyone. ^^;

Thank you for all your wonderful comments. I haven't had time to reply to them all, but I've read each and every one. :heart: I appreciate all of your support.

2013 littleblueraccoon
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ElDiabloRobot Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014
I hope that I would find a girl like that, because I am the same ,I want to be loved and I want to love someone like me ,to heal her pain ,to dry her tears, to be one with her
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xXScattered-Stars Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2014  Student Digital Artist
*raises hand*
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
but if you ask politely,
she'll let you touch her scars.
:love:
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president-m-blue Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You: raise your hand if you're shy and insecure!

me: YOU HAVE NO IDEA. Isuzu Slamming Head Icon 
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St3v-Mylano Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*raise hand* I totally get the feelings
I love it! it's beautiful and I like how you describe it by secrets, worth, like a hidden treasure and yes indeed we are.
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BlynMavis Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014
Why the hell can I relate to this so much? (Face palm) I swear freaking EVERYTHING in that relates to me. God dammit, it sucks being that insecure girl...
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Student Writer
I know that feel 
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snowywolf7 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
*raises hand slowly and blushes*
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Kawaii-Craft Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Student General Artist
//raises hand slowly o//n//o
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IDK9753 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*raises both of my hands* This is so great
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JinglesKitty Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*raises both hands so high it touches the clouds*. This makes me feel better in the point when it comes to finding love. Most people keep talking me I need to put myself out there. This made me feel better knowing tha I an a challenge. And I still am worth having. Thx <3. :3
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artistontheinside Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so incredibly accurate. I absolutely love it! It reminds me of how I used to be. This is beautiful! Clap 
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :heart:
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CLBreeT Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You write the most beautiful poetry. This is no exception. So expressive and accurate that it hurts.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :huggle:
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LinaLestrangeArt Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Student General Artist
*Raises hand*  Im shy Sweating a little... Your poem is very good!
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Pyschotic-Act Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Student General Artist
*Raises hand half way*

Describes me too,somehow

Haha well it is really true (mostly) that artsy types are shy~

Maybe just because some people don't really get our minds
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Kinadom-Raine Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*raises hand halfway* ^///^;
This is perfect.
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LoveMySockhead12 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*raises mah hand* O///O;
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greenpower12 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student
Omg... this ... this is me! XD
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GIMME-SOME-ONIONS Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so amazing. The girl describes me perfectly.
I sort of interpreted the boy differently, though. I saw it as a guy who recognizes her insecurity and notices her (while everyone else is clueless as to her suffering). When he "reached for her heart", I saw it as him trying to coax her 'out of her shell'. And when he smiled at his bleeding fingers, I took it as... even though he has been hurt trying to get to her, he is determined to help her out no matter what it takes.
Forgive me. I'm sorry that that was not what you had intended, but I thought I'd share what I'd gotten from it. :) I got hope that maybe someone would notice me, and would try that hard to get me 'out of my shell'.
So, Thank you for this. I really appreciate it. :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Student Writer
Aw, thank you so much! Your comment is very sweet! :heart: I can see that interpretation, too! You can picture it any way you want to. If that's what it means to you, go for it! I'm sure someone will notice you someday, but don't be afraid to put yourself out there a bit, too! You're very welcome. Thank you for reading & commenting! 
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GIMME-SOME-ONIONS Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
okay! :) thank you so much!!! :D
and it was no problem.
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NightOwl86 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm pretty shy and insecure, and very much prefer to stay in my own armor, so somehow i can sort of relate to this poem and i like it, to be honest i like shy girls a lot because it's nice to have a challenge and because i'm shy and insecure myself too xD But yeah sorry this poem just caught my eye while i was looking at the other one : x I hope my comments aren't stupid and annoying, sorry if they are!
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punx-chan89 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
-raises hand- this is definitely me in a nutshell. I enjoy this poem. You have a gift in poetry  writing. Keep up the good work :la: :w00t: : heart:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :la:
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punx-chan89 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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Tsukikochaan Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
raises hand
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Tsukikochaan Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
raises hand
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Unicornsandjazz Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*raises hand*

i love this.
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*raises hand*
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Unisis-2-in-1-beauty Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student General Artist
*raises hand*


i really liked this...i am very shy and so insecure...so so very much insecure......but i try to hide it exactly for the reason that many people see that as a sign of weakness...i don't like being a "victim", but i do know how it feels...

"glued and reglued"~ i feel like this more often than not
"doesn't need a hurricane to fall apart" ~ true that, i rip myself apart just fine, thank you very much
"drawing pictures of her flickering soul" ~ i do this often... though to most people i just say its a shadow person or a ghost...
"too unsteady to love" ~ i know i am...
"when you reached for her heart, your hands got cut and tangled" ~ i try to make it hard for people to want to love me... so i usually just hurt them a little to start with rather than ending up destroying them at the end
"her splintered ribcage" ~ i have one...getting your heart torn out willingly then trying to stuff it back in there is bound to leave some damage
"you've always loved a challenge." ~ and boy am i a complicated puzzle indeed, but some still try, guess they really do.


Not sure why i typed all that out, i don't usually share so much... i guess it just really touched me and i wanted to explain how... i guess...


^^;
sorry for such a long comment here
but, anywho, ....

Thank you for writing this, its beautiful and touching and i just love love love it!




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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
It's alright! I liked your comment! It's cool to see how you connected with what I wrote. :heart: You're quite welcome, and thank you for commenting!
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Unisis-2-in-1-beauty Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student General Artist
welcome ^-^
glad i didn't bother you with that.
:)
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coolcaro101 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Student Photographer
this is so amazing and creative i'm very shy around most people i feel like i can only trust some people that ik but still idk if i can trust them. 
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themainc Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013
Shy girls are best girls. They're not loud or obnoxious or overbearing. They're stronger than any other simply because they exist this way.

 And if you are ever so lightening struck lucky to ever have one care about you in any sort of way, then you know that it is genuine and real and you're not just some novelty or boytoy that will be thrown away by the more 'normal' girls. If you ever are that lucky you get down on your knees and thank whatever higher power or twist of fate you believe in for leading you to her.

Shoutout to all the shy girls that, at least some of us, do know you exist, do see you for who you are, and want to thank you for simply existing and making the world a nicer place.
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TheLordTaxus Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013
I've learned something about shy people: it is hard for them to trust but once you gain their trust they make excellent friends and seldom betray you and when they speak you should listen. But if you betray their trust it is lost forever and can never be regained.
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Crazyartist78708 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*Hand raised to the ceiling* Definitely me.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Student Writer
:highfive:
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ohbeautifuldelilah Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Student Writer
*raises hand halfway*
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HeyImNatalia Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014
I see what you did there...
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katnisseverdeen4life Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*cautiously raises hand* that's me. 
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
:hug:

Thank you for commenting. :heart:
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DiDi-dias Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I'm pretty quiet myself, however I actually have a friend who is so shy she doesn't talk. AT ALL. How am I supposed to know what she thinks of me!? :XD:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, that's insane! Maybe if you talk to her more often, she'll talk back! :)
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DiDi-dias Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Yeah, she doesn't even talk to her best friend who is always chatting and with her all the time, she doesn't seem to mind so I guess they have a ok relationship. :shrug:
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BlackSheep6 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
make her an origami crane. if she takes it and smiles a little or if she at least holds it for a while, studying it in her hands, there's chances she likes you. but then, who am I, the Queen Awkward, to give advice... ^^'
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DiDi-dias Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
She's always smiling so idk about that. I'm pretty awkward too so I feel you!:XD:
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BlackSheep6 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, you know, often the awkward people proove to be much nicer company than the seemingly perfect, outgoing, communicative people. At least I prefer the awkward. ^^
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DiDi-dias Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
It's nice to know there are people who would enjoy my company, but it's just upsetting when there are people I just can't 'click' with and it seems like I'm boring them :icongivingupplz:
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