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i. men fear strong women,
but she's far from strong.
this wisp of a girl
doesn't even need a hurricane
to fall apart.
she'd glued and re-glued,
old bonds wearing thin,
but if you ask politely,
she'll let you touch her scars.

ii. her lips are fettered in rusted chains.
you'd need a crowbar to pry up
her whispered secrets.
you are not worthy to hear her voice
just as she is not worthy to give it to you.
she told me everything she knows,
and i shut it away,
kept it safe.
i tied the threads into double knots
just to make sure
they wouldn't curl away from me,
twisted up like a dead spider's legs.

iii. she is hewn from shadow,
woven from grains of sand.
you might think she'd flow,
breeze by on a sparrow's breath,
but she's never been good at
anything but sinking.
she is buried treasure, and all
the things you wish you could forget.

iv. you found her washed up on the shore,
drawing pictures of her flickering soul,
and knew she was too unsteady to love.
when you reached for her heart,
your hands got cut and tangled
in her splintered ribcage

you smiled at your bleeding fingers
because you've always loved a challenge.
raise your hand if you're shy and insecure! *raises hand* 

I have no idea where this came from but ehh here it is. I know I haven't been updating recently, but it's been crazy here with the holidays coming and all. my family is so dysfunctional it's not even funny.

anyway, how did i do with this? good? bad? let me know! i love your feedback. :)

EDIT: I've found that so many of you guys relate to this poem! Us artsy types are usually shy, I suppose. You are all lovely people; I can't thank you enough for your support. :heart:

Also, a few people were confused on the meaning of this poem, so I'll include my explanation for it here as well:

The woman in this poem is meant to be viewed as quiet, timid, and demure on the outside. It isn't to say that this woman isn't strong; I tried to keep her personality out of the poem because I wanted to focus on how shyness appears from an outside perspective. I also don't mean to imply that shy women in general are weak, because that's just not true. This particular shy girl comes across as weak. That's all. The thing about men, though, is something I've heard said by many different people in my life. Hearing them say that is kind of what inspired me to write this, as a matter of fact! Blush

The first stanza is meant to describe how being shy makes the girl seem weak. The second describes how she's quiet, and keeps her thoughts to herself. The third represents the way she is easily lost in a crowd, and fragile-looking. The final stanza, with her drawing pictures on a shore alone, is supposed to show how she feels lonely deep down. Her splintered ribcage represents the ways she tries to distance herself from others.

If you find the guy at the end creepy, that's good. I guess I wanted to make the poem seem like an advertisement directed toward a not-so-good man as to why a shy girl would make an excellent "victim" for him. It is a little rough and I think some parts need a rewrite to make my point more clear.

Yeah...sorry for any confusion. I hope I didn't offend anyone. ^^;

Thank you for all your wonderful comments. I haven't had time to reply to them all, but I've read each and every one. :heart: I appreciate all of your support.

© 2013 littleblueraccoon
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BlynMavis Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014
Why the hell can I relate to this so much? (Face palm) I swear freaking EVERYTHING in that relates to me. God dammit, it sucks being that insecure girl...
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Student Writer
I know that feel 
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snowywolf7 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
*raises hand slowly and blushes*
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Kawaii-Craft Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Student General Artist
//raises hand slowly o//n//o
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IDK9753 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*raises both of my hands* This is so great
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JinglesKitty Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*raises both hands so high it touches the clouds*. This makes me feel better in the point when it comes to finding love. Most people keep talking me I need to put myself out there. This made me feel better knowing tha I an a challenge. And I still am worth having. Thx <3. :3
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artistontheinside Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so incredibly accurate. I absolutely love it! It reminds me of how I used to be. This is beautiful! Clap 
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :heart:
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CLBreeT Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You write the most beautiful poetry. This is no exception. So expressive and accurate that it hurts.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :huggle:
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