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February 19


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"Last summer I took my cell phone to the beach,"
she says,
        "and the ocean drenched it.
         It hasn't worked since then."

She's messy, truly,
                     a dead battery,
                     a gauge hovering on empty.

I tell her to call the phone company,
get a back up or refund or some other nonsense.

She sighs
         (her lips didn't move).
For a moment I think
she's going to push me away again,
film up like ankle-cutting sea glass.

"I can't replace it.
I'll lose the last text message
he ever sent me."

I fall quiet because I know.

Today I see the cell phone,
                          and silent
                          with no hope of ringing
                          ever again.
The tide takes things
if you forget where you put them.
Sometimes I think she just forgot
that she remembered him.

A year  later,
             and she is still
                              shaking away the sand.
it's a long story.

anyway, this is a different style than I usually write in. What do you think? 

  2014 littleblueraccoon
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PolkaDottedCoffeeMug Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student General Artist
Great poem (as always) though it's holding back a lot of information. I understand the part about why she's keeping the cell phone and the whole poem was just... awesome. Good job!
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I really wanted to keep this one subtle :lol:
Banana-peel Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist
Nice, it confuses me; but it sounds sweet. ( the part about losing a last text)
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! "Losing the last text" refers to the fact that, if the girl in the poem gets rid of her phone, she will no longer have the last message her lost love sent to her. Kind of like losing his last words. It's got a sentimental value to it, and she can't get rid of it because it's like getting rid of he, himself.
Banana-peel Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist
ya cool... :D
MedowFlower Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love love love this!!! It just.. touches my heart. ;m; You did a beautiful job as usual~! And I do like this style very much. C:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Writer
I'm so happy to hear that! Whee! Thank you so much! 
smilekeeper Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think it's a nice way to incorporate a short story.
Maybe you could do more like this until this type of
poem style becomes comfortable?
I think it's nice you wanted to branch out into a different
poem style.
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I think I need to mess with it a little more, too. :hug: Thank you for all of the favorites, by the way! 
smilekeeper Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! (:
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